First, i noticed you always seek to make a text that is 110% readable. While usually you don't need to make your text appealing to the eye, text should be treated as a secondary effect that helps the flow. Second, you use allot of effects, for example there is at least 3 C4Ds over there if not more. I can't remember a time where i had to use more than 2 C4Ds for one tag, and that's rare too, only one out of ten tags usually have more than 1 C4D used.
Light control is good, Shadow control from the other hand is poor. I can't see any Curves, Levels, Exposure, or Brightness and Contrast used in there. Finally the flow, where is it?