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[Novel] The Zodiac Empire

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pollWho's your favorite character?

Naito
1
20%
Alsen
0
0%
Cosena
0
0%
Sartur
0
0%
Shadow
1
20%
Croakie
0
0%
Alile
1
20%
Alvisa
0
0%
Zento
0
0%
Leah
0
0%
Mary
2
40%
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Hey guys sorry bout not giving you anymore chapters of Heaven Academy yet, my editor has been MIA. So to make up for it, I'll show you the other novel im working on, The Zodiac Empire.

Read in link below or the spoiler
http://sta.sh/07llp2htzep

The Zodiac Empire
Prologue
 
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Very nice, I love how pretty much all the basic lore is established in this short bit.

Looking forward to the rest.

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Yay someone likes it :D ill post ch1 now, will post ch2 when im done making some changes

http://sta.sh/01b43beve4vn

Chapter 1


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Slow, but sets up what can only be at least 1 main character, so its understandable.

Eagerly awaiting Ch. 2

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thnx :D heres ch2

Chapter 2

http://sta.sh/01gb4mz23kur
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Welllll thennn. Bit disturbing, but certainly attention grabbing. Great Chapter

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done changing ch3 from present tense to past tense, so here it comes alongside ch4 :D ch4 is were things truly get interesting

http://sta.sh/06pv3srvu7t
http://sta.sh/0cen91nvqqo

[size=32]Chapter 3[/size]


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Chapter 4


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Things do indeed get interesting in Ch. 4

Not sure where this is going, which is this Novel's greatest strength IMO, its like the Song of Ice and Fire series, it keeps you guessing on what will happen until it finally happens.

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really glad you're enjoying it :D I been working on this for over a year

Heres ch5 and ch6

http://sta.sh/0di15lyn732

http://sta.sh/011yxt8wx3g5
Chapter 5


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From mystery to action. Very nice.

Keep the quality up. Can't wait for the next chapter.

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chapter 7 contains both mystery and action :D

Chapter 7
http://sta.sh/01itcfv6nlh7

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Dayum

Can't wait to see how this goes.

I rate 10.1/10

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10.1 Surprised that means it's slightly above perfecto! :D

Chapter Eight


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Barely any screen time and Satur seems like the biggest douche in the world.

Pretty good, not my fav chapter, but thats because I take bullying scenes a bit personally.

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Looks like Sartur wont be leading any character popularity polls XD

heres ch9. Very short for the sake of cliffhangers

Chapter 9


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Linda, are you alright? It takes an insane person to have moments like that.

Good chapter, but disturbing as all eff.

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Maybe I like that I'm not alright.

Heres ch10, but be warned: the action might need alot of work. I'll let you guys decide if its good as is or needs alot of improvment to be awesome


Chapter 10
http://sta.sh/05e2tn4nz2

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The action, while slightly bland, is far from the worst I've read.

Personally, this chapter would be 9.8 or so out of 10 due to the revelations on certain characters.

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I find writing action alot smoother when it's Naito vs Mary. Other times it gets complicated >.<

Chapter 11


http://sta.sh/0e0r7sr2dgo


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Chapter 12
http://sta.sh/01bnjvhwqy1r



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Very nice, and did your avatar have any influence on the knife in Ch. 11?

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No I wrote this way before I started using this avatar.

Chapter 13
http://sta.sh/01qdvfgny3n8

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Finally, a Satur scene where he isn't the de facto dominant force in the room.

Very nice

10.2/10

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Time for insight on other characters.


Chapter 14
http://sta.sh/01bd58hhmi0d


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Knew she had something to do with someone's past. It just made too much sense.

Great revelations, explains a good deal actually.

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ch15 wont be done for a while, so here's a character popularity poll instead

Edit: I totally forgot to put Mary in the poll and I cant seem to make any changes to it, so if she's your fav char, vote Someone not listed...pretty sure she's the only one not listed anyway

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Mary best character because pretty much every scene with her is crazy af.

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Huge delay bc I wasnt writing while I had pneumonia, but here's ch15

http://sta.sh/01mussfrf50v

Chapter 15

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Chapter 16 is here, and cray cray shit happens.


Chapter 16

http://sta.sh/022xxfayhrqc



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Alright sorry for the huge delay, heres ch17. Please forgive me if it sucks, this chapter was extremely hard to write and slowed down my writing progress significantly. Let me know if you spot any mistakes in there. I'll post chapter eighteen as well, and chapter 19 will be posted later or tomorrow.

Also, important Author's Note: Alvisa's name has been changed to Casele, due to the confusion of so many characters having 'A' names. Also, I am going back and editing each chapter. If you want to read the edited chapters (which I highly advise), you can find them here on my blog 


Chapter 17


Prince Silver



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Chapter 18


Fire and Ice



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http://sta.sh/0i3ki1drvfy

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