If you want the render to be in focus of watchers eyes, you mustn't put a big c4d distracting the eye. Same for this attempt of yours: http://www.duelacademy.net/t28313-dead-space
Hide this part https://2img.net/h/oi41.tinypic.com/2vkcakl.png
And here you've chosen a hard render as it has a hand as big as the whole other part.
BTW, Kimo's tutorial is very good for everybody, it would be very good if you read it: http://www.duelacademy.net/t10404-a-kimo-force-photoshop-tutorial-for-dummies?highlight=for+dummies