The composition is nice, light, chromatics, blending, depth aswell.
Not a fan of the border to be honest, it contrasts with the black and ruins the attention from the focals. I always prefered 1px dark for this reason or something less noticeable.
Is this a solid render with 2 focals? If it is, I feel sorry for you, trying to build a flow with this material D:
I won't discuss the text here because it's friggin' hard to find a spot for it, so you did your best I'd say.
8.5/10 D:, maybe more maybe less, idk shit XD